Task2: Ambition is an important characteristic of people. How important is it for people to make success in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic for success?
文章中红色标注的考官批改的内容~ 括号中是考官的评语~
Ambition is the desire(Nice definition of ambition) for accomplishment, and it is widely believed that ambitious people are likely to succeedprecisely because they have the internal drive to achieve their goals. In my opinion, although being ambitious is important to make a success out of life, it brings people both benefits and disadvantages (In English we usually pair ‘advantages and disadvantages’ and ‘benefits and drawbacks’).
开头简洁明了，用ambition的定义展开这个话题~ 既自然又能妥妥的直切主题！~ 接着回答题目中的两个问题：尽管一个人有没有野心对成功很重要，但是野心也是一把双刃剑。仅仅是一个开头，无忧小雅哥&悉尼雅思姐就要给这位小伙伴点个zan啦，在开头段写Introduction和answer the question才是这类题型最正确的写法！~
Having a sense of ambition helps people establish clear goals, and motivates them to make a sincere effort towards achieving their target. For example, students who aspire to become lawyers in the future have to be highly motivated to study hard because most law schools have high academic entry requirements. Also, ambition drives (good) people to make optimal use of their available resources, such as time and money, because these resources are scarce. People must therefore make choices between different things that they can do, and definitely choose to do those things that will achieve their personal goals first. For instance, many geniuses, such as Bill Gates and Steve Jobs, quit their universities to start their own businesses at an early age because time is precious and they chose to allocate it to their career vision.
However, it is not true that the desire for success is all positive. Ambition may be positive or negative depending on a person’s specific situation. Setting an unrealistic goal may be a waste of time and passion, and sometimes such goals may mislead people. For example, some people want to become billionaires in a short time. Actually, only a few people in the world can achieve this success, and the rest may eventually have to give up their dreams and sacrifice their efforts and capital which were(I changed the verb to the plural form because both effort and capital are invested) invested in this ambition. Also, in order to achieve the impossible dream, some dreamers may seek illegal opportunities to earn a huge profit such as selling drugs.
In conclusion, ambition does make a contribution to people’s success but it is the goal which suits the specific situation that is likely to produce positive outcomes.
无忧雅思内部考官改作文除了把学员文章中的错误改出来以外，还会根据雅思写作4项评分标准（TR & CC & LR & GRA）分别打分和提供评语哦！~ 这样烤鸭们就能看出自己哪一项是比较薄弱的，就可以在这一项上多下点功夫，只有找对了方向，才好使劲哦！~
TASK RESPONSE： 8
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
Presents a well-developed response to the question with relevant, extended and supported ideas.
By the way, the most commonly perceived downside of ambition is that it can make people ruthless where they want to succeed at any price. For example they neglect their personal relationships. They may also not be interested in helping other people much because they have eyes only for their own goals. So ambition can make people very self-centred and egotistical.